http://qarrtsiluni.com/2008/10/24/razorwire/ online literary magazine Thu, 09 Feb 2012 03:09:39 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.com/ http://qarrtsiluni.com/2008/10/24/razorwire/#comment-14668 Sat, 01 Nov 2008 12:31:33 +0000 http://qarrtsiluni.wordpress.com/?p=2164#comment-14668 Yes, I like this one.

]]> http://qarrtsiluni.com/2008/10/24/razorwire/#comment-14629 Fri, 31 Oct 2008 19:06:33 +0000 http://qarrtsiluni.wordpress.com/?p=2164#comment-14629 I take this as a love poem, and they are extremely hard to write. Your weaving of the desk as a central metaphor and connection between lovers is exceptional, how it reflects the detritus of our lives in miniature. The suggested address to the mother skirts the inexplicable–the “blighted tree” does not fit into the dyad. Breasts as moths are wonderful. Stepping outside the desk zone into the world of relationships is an apt metaphor for a risky choice. Risk on!

]]> http://qarrtsiluni.com/2008/10/24/razorwire/#comment-14600 Fri, 31 Oct 2008 00:21:34 +0000 http://qarrtsiluni.wordpress.com/?p=2164#comment-14600 This is beautiful- “I wanted to want you more thoroughly” Great line.

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